But it is now that cold metal passes between her fingertips over and over, as if they are desperate to be held in her hand. -Sentence is a bit confusing. Am I supposed to be reading it like "...it is now that cold metal that passes between..."?
She stands; still holding the bag in both hands and resumes her walk, already feeling much happier about having to stop in the first place. -Bit of an unnecessary semicolon, just for the awkwardness with which I'm reading it. I would do a "She stands, still holding the bag in both hands, and resumes her walk, already feeling..."
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Date: 2009-03-23 10:59 pm (UTC)-Sentence is a bit confusing. Am I supposed to be reading it like "...it is now that cold metal that passes between..."?
She stands; still holding the bag in both hands and resumes her walk, already feeling much happier about having to stop in the first place.
-Bit of an unnecessary semicolon, just for the awkwardness with which I'm reading it. I would do a "She stands, still holding the bag in both hands, and resumes her walk, already feeling..."