[SPN]: Redemption is just another ten letter word.

[lemanya]

For spn_30 snapshots.

prompt 11 on my table.

11. I believe Icarus was not failing as he fell/ But just coming to the end of his triumph.

R, 203 words, Post season 4 and slightly blasphemous.


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Our Father, who art in Heaven
                                  Lucifer is risen.
Hallowed be thy name
                                           Sam. Sammy. We gotta go.
                                   Light. So much light. Death. So much death.
Thy Kingdom come, thy will-
                                            Dean- he’s coming.
Be done on earth
                                            Sam!
                                   Doors creaking, footsteps breaking, hearts hammering. Soundtrack of staccato rhythms. 
                                   Ba-da-bing, ba-da-bing-bang-fucking-boom.
As it is in Heaven
                                     Run.
Give us this day our daily bread
                                            Please Sam, run.
                                    Run, run, run, as fast as you can.
And forgive us our sins
                                    You can’t catch me I’m the King of the Damned.
                                            I’m so sorry Dean.
Oh God, forgive us our sins
                                    Tyres jolting, engine screaming, road short and unending.
Please…
                                    Christ, with bullet holes in his hands and a bleeding mouth on his side:
                                    Ripped asunder and scattered across a thousand stillborn skies.
I believe he screamed.
                                   One thousand, four hundred and fifty one miles from Maryland to South Dakota.
                                   Count them.
I believe in the Father, and in the Son
                                            You’re still my brother.
and in the broken, foul-mouthed Spirit.
                                            Wasn’t your fault, Sammy.
So forgive us our sins
                                    As He breaks, so shall It break.
And deliver us from evil.                    
                                    It wasn’t your fault.
Yes Dean- it was.
                                    No… it was mine.

Comments

[mimblexwimble.livejournal.com]

Whoa. *shivers*

[dime-for-12.livejournal.com]

Oh my god. I'm so happy that I decided to click despite your warning (I'm not religious, but.).

I love this. Like--a lot.

*mems*

[scintilla10.livejournal.com]

Wow, very powerful! I particularly liked this line: Doors creaking, footsteps breaking, hearts hammering. Soundtrack of staccato rhythms. And this turn of phrase: a thousand stillborn skies.

[authoressnebula.livejournal.com]

Beautiful, and EXACTLY what I was hoping for so badly.

Thank you so much for sharing this. ♥

~Nebula

[mangacat201.livejournal.com]

I've been waiting for him to say that. ALL FRICKING 80-something minutes of screen time they had up to now. I've BEEN waiting and I HOPE for him he'll do it soon... or else.
Cat

[amberdreams.livejournal.com]

Powerful and poetic! You got recc'd here http://spnroundtable.livejournal.com/285990.html as a hidden gem and they were right! :D

[oxoniensis.livejournal.com]

Another person here from the spnroundtable rec - beautiful writing!

[synapticshiver.livejournal.com]

Also here via the spn_roundtable rec: Beautiful writing and very interesting format! Poor Sam and Dean....

[ruby-jelly.livejournal.com]

I've actually read this a couple of times - you know, one that draws and repels at the same time? It's SO HARD to be reminded of and recognise the pain and anguish of both Sam and Dean. The prayer itself is an inherent part of me, so connecting the two hurts. It feels like hope is crushed by reality, or something......

Beautifully crafted, thank you!